FEEDBACK:

“Hi Marley!

The central thesis—that "nature" is a human construct that paradoxically excludes humans from the natural world—is intellectually sophisticated and genuinely thought-provoking. Your engagement with Alan Wallace's Buddhist philosophy and Surrealist automatism shows you're drawing from serious theoretical frameworks rather than superficial inspiration.

While your philosophical framework is strong, you acknowledge that "attempts to articulate it without using superfluous language have been difficult" —this is a critical weakness that could render your entire project inaccessible to viewers. You need concrete strategies for how the photobook itself will communicate these ideas visually without requiring readers to wade through dense philosophical text. Will you include written components? If so, what form—an artist statement, image captions, fragmentary text interwoven with images? How will the sequencing and juxtaposition of glitched images create meaning?

There's not a great sense of what the outcome of the images would look like and your presentation would benefit from exploring some of your existing work.  They are on the screen but your presentation philosophises at a higher level than directly examines the artwork.  I would encourage you to make sure the work is pulled together in a manner beyond the glitches as this could come across a little gimicky - and ensuring that the base images are strong.

Great idea and I look forward to seeing it progress.”

- Tricia King