FEEDBACK:

“Hi Marley!

It's excellent to see you approach the work with such diversity - selecting two distinctly different photographers has allowed you to genuinely experiment and explore different creative territories. It's a shame that you haven't included images from your chosen photographers in your journal as it leaves me without a reference point to understand your creative connections. Indeed, I did a deep internet search for Keith A.W. Williams and only found a couple of book covers, so having examples of his work would have really helped contextualise your approach. Similarly, make sure you include your own images within the journal text - it makes it much easier to read and follow your discussion when the image you're analysing is right there alongside your writing.

Your two botanical images are genuinely engaging - the black background really allows the subjects to stand out and your lighting approach creates interesting depth and drama. The purple flower is slightly too dark though, and a bit more contrast and brightness might have allowed it to pop from the background more effectively. The street work is interesting and the corrupted SD card technique does give it a unique visual aesthetic. I myself have experienced this technical "accident" and was really excited by the creative outcomes it produced! Your base image in the first street photograph is much stronger than the train station piece. Make sure you're refining your base images carefully if you plan to use this corruption technique in task 3, as the strength of the underlying composition really affects the final impact. Overall this is a solid assignment - your journal is detailed and shows good reflection, but it's quite challenging to read as continuous text on a black page without any visual breaks or accompanying images.”

- Tricia King